Fayes

Username and Diary Title- Crystalfayes- surf the night with me

First Impressions- I literally said, “Ooh, purdy” when the picture finally loaded.

Content- How to you go from this, which made me sigh and roll my eyes, to this, which was so lovely? The second I saw this entry title, I knew I’d have that horrid Spice Girls song of the same name stuck in my head for the next week and a half. I’m blaming the headache on you… The poem in that entry is beautiful. The bit at the bottom was not. No one gives a crap about The Truman Show. Not even Jim Carrey. I really liked this poem, too.

This was just one big pile of what the hell. What’s with this: “o.O”? I finally figured out that you hated your Chinese class, but everything was just so convoluted and you went off on so many tangents that it took me a while.

I loved How Many Times Do You See Eyes Filled With True Love. Very poignant and meaningful. People should read this and take it to heart. Chill out, indeed.

I tried to read most of your entries, I really did, but it just got to the point where I was scrolling through them trying to find something other than the poetry and short stories that was even the tiniest bit coherent. It was frustrating because I know you can write better than that but entry after entry is just this big mass of rambles, and slang, and confusion.

There’s such a huge disparity between your writings and poetry and the day logs. I just don’t understand it. My advise would be to sit down and put as much effort into the day log entries as you do into the poetry. You are a very talented writer when you want to be and you could have an all around wonderful diary if you tried. Instead of just sitting down and talking at me, talk to me. Pretend I’m sitting next to you and tell me a story. You wouldn’t say something like this: “*Sighs then looks into space with dreamy eyes*” to someone you’re speaking to, right? That kind of aside is completely unnecessary.

Make me laugh. Make me think. Make me feel how you feel. And then you’ll have a great diary. [35/ 100]

Template- Credited to: Designs by Kat. Good god, did that picture take long to load! At least the text box popped up right away so that I could read while I waited (… and waited) for that picture to load. It was worth the wait though. The picture is beautiful, very calming and serene. I love the shades of blue used in the picture and throughout the rest of the layout. The only complaint I have is the size of the links. They should be much larger and easier to find. I like the effect when you hover over them, though. [19/ 20]

Grammar- You use entirely too much slang in you day log entries. Duhz? Duhz? How is it that you managed to take a rather idiotic slang term and make it sound even more asinine? It’s.. a talent, these aberrations of grammar you are able to create. Aniwaez ! Stuffies! Wellz! But you mentioned you’re going to stop using made up words, so I’ll give you a few points for that. [3/ 20]

Errors and Organization- There aren’t any paragraph breaks. I hate that. There weren’t any other technical issues though. [7/ 10]

Contact- Book, notes, e-mail, and comments. [10/ 10]

Link- Under links, right where you said it was. [5/ 5]

Extras- Link to your profile and a links page with a lot of links to your friends’ diaries and review sites. [4/ 10]

Sagacious Quote- “When I was born, I cried and the world rejoiced. I want to live my life so that when I die, I rejoice and the world cries.”

It’s wonderful, beautiful, and thoughtful. Do I need to say that I love it? [20/ 20]

Return- I honestly don’t know. [3/ 5]

Total- [106/ 200]

Comments- Write some real entries to mix in with your fantastic writings and it could be great.